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Tips on Writing a Persuasive Cover Letter
Part [1][2 [3] [4] [5] [6] [7] [8] [9] [10] [11]

Part Three: Open quickly ... with a difference

Every cover letter guide talks about the importance of an opening that "grabs attention" or "generates interest." Then they turn around and give sample letters with standard openers like:

"Please accept this letter as application for the Process Engineer position currently available with your company."

"I am very interested in obtaining a position with your organization. Enclosed please find my resume for your review."

"In response to your ad in the [paper] I wish to apply for the position of [whatever]"
Give these lines full marks for getting to the point, but they could have been written by a machine. Instead of generating interest, these openers have the employer thinking "here's another one!" They've read the same line dozens of times before.

For advertised openings, probably 90 percent of the responses begin by mentioning the ad. Which means this is something you might want to avoid.

Stanley Wynett, a cover letter writer in Flushing, New York developed this opening which, while not particularly gripping, lets you get to the point quickly and sound like a human being:


Several things you mention in your ad for a [position advertised] make me think you may be looking for someone with my experience. Let me briefly explain.
There are many ways to open your letter. Whatever opening you use, get to the point quickly -- or the reader will move on to something else. Here are some ways to begin:

Personal Referral: "John Hughes from [wherever] suggested I contact you about ..." If you have a name to drop, the beginning of your letter is usually the best place to do it. A good way to get your letter past anyone screening the mail of the person you're writing to.

Question or Headline: I'm not a fan of this approach. As much as I like to apply techniques from direct mail selling, this approach may scream out "advertising!" (or, even worse, "junk mail!") and hinder the personal connection you're trying to make.

News You've Read: Usually about the company or their industry. This can be done very well or very poorly -- it comes down to how strongly you connect this tidbit to something that will make the reader interested in you. No one really cares about what you've read, but if you quickly segue into discussing how this news made you think you can contribute to the organization, then you've got a strong opening.

Quotation/Saying: Certainly different, but it should be directly related to a good reason for the employer to meet with you (see sample letter #2).

Your Job Objective: You haven't done anything yet to make the reader care what you're looking for. It's better to talk about what the reader wants -- how you can help them achieve their objectives.

No matter how you begin, get right to discussing the value you think you'd bring to their organization. In fact, I've found one of the best openers is to say something like "Here's what I will bring to/can offer [organization] as a [position]" and start describing the benefits they'd receive in hiring you. It tells them right away why you're writing, and brings you immediately to communicating the value you offer.

There are many other offbeat ways to open your letter so it won't sound like it's been copied out of a dull cover letter book or be just like the same old boilerplate material that nearly everyone else still uses.

Read More About Writing a Persuasive Cover Letter:

  • 2. Writing the letter Read it here
  • 3. Open quickly ... with a difference Read it here
  • 4. Finish with a call to action Read it here
  • 5. Some strategies for responding to advertised positions Read it here
  • 6. Salary expectations Read it here
  • 7. Format, paper, and other basics Read it here
  • 8. Sample letter #1 -- Robert McCarthy Read it here
  • 9. Sample letter #2 -- Carol Gainer Read it here
  • 10. Sample letter #3 -- Norman Waite Read it here
  • 11. Final word
    The problem with all guides to resumes and cover letters is that they may make you believe there are absolute rules which must be followed.... Read it here

  • How to Prepare For An Employment Interview
    by Gary Will
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    CONTENTS:

    1. "Selling yourself" at an employment interview
    2. Is preparation even possible?
    3. The interview isn't about YOU -- it's about the employer
    4. Soothing the employer's anxieties
    5. Preparing for the interview -- an overview
    6. THE COMPANY: The information you'll want and where to look for it
    7. What you should know about business
    8. THE POSITION: How will you make a contribution?
    9. Preparing to answer
    10. What kind of person are you?
    11. Approaches to answering some common questions
    12. Some questions to practise
    13. Anticipating employers' concerns
    14. Asking questions -- an essential and overlooked step
    15. Going all out for the offer ... and why we hold back
    16. How to handle salary questions
    17. Beyond the answers -- image and presentation
    18. Using written materials & presentation visuals
    19. How to prepare your references
    20. Recent developments in interview formats
    21. Reviewing the interview
    22. Following up without being a pest
    23. Some final thoughts
    24. U.S.: Recommended books
    25. Canada: Recommended books
    26. UK: Recommended books
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